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The Yougasha Preview? by ~ElementWing:iconElementWing:





A hard hand connected with her face before she even had the time to blink. Her head whipped back and all she could do was stare in shock, the only coherent thought in her mind was 'He...slapped...me...'. She let the bangs fall down to cover her eyes and she became aware of an almost unbearable sting across her cheek, warmth seeped from the spot and the only reason that she could think behind it was that she was bleeding.

Yogashu stared down at his hand, mortified. He couldn't belive what he had just done and his mind tried to reason the situtauon telling him that it didn't happen and yet he was staring at the same hand that had just hit the face of the girl he had come to care about. Instant regret and fear gripped his heart, piercing it sending chills along the length of his body. His mind was frantically searching but for what? Yogashu hoped beyond hope that this was some sick twisted dream, but the pain in his chest told him otherwidse.With terrified eyes he hesitantly looked up at the girl and without his permission the defiled hand started to shake violently. Katt's head was twisted away from him and her hair hung loosley down to hide her face from the man who had struck her. Another shot of pain jolted through his heart and his ears flattened back tight against his head. The wind picked up tugging at the girls hair so her face was completley gone from his view. As mere seconds dragged on he began to panic. Why wasn't she doing anything?The overwhelming desire to have her in his arms and have her forgive him for his cruel and wretched actions made his chest ache.

"K-Katt I'm so sorry please--" but he barley stuttered his words out as her face whipped around so fast he could hear the air swish through her hair as it lashed to the side.

Her eyes burned with such intensity and her teeth were clacked together in a tight snarl. The ususally livley and happy brown of her eyes were twisting and smoldering in rage. Her soft brown hair glided away from her face and thats when he saw it... saw the four long gouges the lay along her cheek. They dripped her blood and his body went ridgid at the scent . He quickly glanced at his claws and was horridied when he saw the blood twisted around them. 'I...made her..bleed' was his last thought before a hard fist connected with his gut.

Though he was part Moujuu the intesity of her punch pained both his stomache and his heart, he almost missed the sound of her knuckle cracking at the impact. He hunched forward and grunted in pain but he didn't have time to decipher the hurt when a well aimed kick smashed into the side of his face. His hand instinctivley went up to cup his stinging cheek and he stared in horror at th enraged girl standing infront of him. Yogashu's moth gaped open so he could speek but no words came out.

"I HATE you!!!" she screeched with as much venom as she could put into her dominant voice. The moujuu could have sworn that his heart stopped at the words as his mind tried to process what she was saying.

"Go On become a jigoku-moujuu see if I FUCKING care!!!! I don't give a shit what you do anymore you can just leave I don't need you anymore!!" and with those final words she ran in that unatural speed only a human like her could posses.

She was gone, only a small trail of swirling wind left in her place. His mind couldn't even think nothing that happened in the past few seconds made sense to him. Yogasha fell heavily to his knees, his blue eyes were blank and full of hurt. His clawed hand that had struck and slashed the girl he cared for still cupped his stinging cheek. But the pain in his heart was worse.

"She...She hates me...?" he mumbled in a voice filled with pained questions.

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©2009 ~ElementWing
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Author's Comments

A scene from my upcoming comic 'The Yougasha'????
Well I guess you'll have to wait and find out and read the comic to find out more about what leads up to this possible scene and how it all ends afterwords
(by the way I wrote this a while ago so if I use this scene it WILL be changed in the actual comic...or will it *giggles*)
MWAHAHAHA I just love the violence don't you lol
Tell me what you think is it epic? Boring? Offensive? Horrific? Terrible? Totaly awsome? tell me please =D

(C) I OWN EVERYTHING SO IF YOU STEAL I WILL LAWNMOWER YOU TO PIECES lol yes I have a lawn mower to XD

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:iconsugarbubblegum333:
Cool! It's very well detailed. I'm really excited now. Comiccomiccomiccomiccomiccomic. Is noticable that I'm crazy? :crazy:

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Me: tehe I'm in love with the world and all it\'s glory!
Shadow: I hate the world and all it\'s stupidness!
Me: Me sad now
Shadow: Good!
Me: *shoots Shadow in the kneecap* Me happy now
Shadow: Not good!

This signature proves.........I'm weird! :crazy:
:iconelementwing:
LOL ya I actualy typed this out way before I even decided to make it into an actual manga LOL
And thankyou I hope I won't keep you waiting to long

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I'm a stinky old procrastinator -disgusted with self-
:iconn2hobbes:
There's so much to say, but I'm quite a bit in awe and trying to get my thoughts together. :omg:
I am so very impressed! :) You did an awesome job painting the scene. I could easily create it in my head and watch it play out. I could feel Yougashu’s grief, as well as shudder at Katt’s anger. There are many things that make someone a good writer, in my opinion, but by far two of them can cause me to continue reading a story or stop: a good storyline and the ability to command the scene with well thought out description. (Two things all college textbooks lack... and is why I dislike the majority of them. :lol:)
There’s no need for me to say: “Keep working hard.” because every time you update this story, you show that you already are. :)

I really need to get back to my story. I have two chapters written (sitting and waiting to be scrutinized/finalized), a third almost done and 13+ pages of notes of more stuff to write..... but it is nowhere as good as this. I think that it will have its moments, but I’m going to have to cut out some boring stuff. =p
lol - There's also a nice whack to the face in my story, but it plays out much different. And that's all I will say. :D

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It’s cause I’m blonde isn’t it! :crazy:
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:jarksaber: I support °jark :salute:
:iconelementwing:
..... O_O ....... yes ... very LMAO

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I'm a stinky old procrastinator -disgusted with self-
:iconsugarbubblegum333:
:XD: It's alright, it doesn't last long.................I hope :O

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Me: tehe I'm in love with the world and all it\'s glory!
Shadow: I hate the world and all it\'s stupidness!
Me: Me sad now
Shadow: Good!
Me: *shoots Shadow in the kneecap* Me happy now
Shadow: Not good!

This signature proves.........I'm weird! :crazy:
:iconelementwing:
Awwz I don't know what to say but it was wierd cus I was just sitting at the computer desk reading the Inuyasha manga and thn I sat for a minuet thinking about nothing in particular when WHAM!!! it came to me and I though OLY CRAP I must add this to my story and the after the whole slap scene developed it ended up becoming a very important part of a huge chuck ofthe story line and I was soooo happy afterwords. I was also very emotional when writing this scene cus I basicall am Katt she is my inner self ^^; and everyhing that was going through my mind I imagined going through her although this was mostly in Yogashu's point of view
Your comment though made me feel really enlightlened and I am soo very happy for it :glomp:
I'm considering putting up more little clips like this ...What do you think?
Oh Good luck with your story by the way I'm very interested to know what its about!! O_O..... *STARE*.....O_O lol ^_^

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I'm a stinky old procrastinator -disgusted with self-
:iconn2hobbes:
The best thoughts always come quickly and at random times. Some of the best ideas in my story have come about 2am when I'm just about to go to sleep, but I have to get up, turn on the laptop again and write some notes or the idea will be lost forever.

Ultimately you are writing the story for yourself, but it sure is a exhilarating rush of inspiration when nice comments come your way. :D I'm glad that I can provide. :D

If you want to put them up, go ahead because I’ll do my best to get on here and read them. :) Consider this though: Will it enhance or detract from the manga? Will you be getting wanted or unwanted influence from your readers to tweak the storyline?
It’s all up to you. :D

I haven’t put my stuff up yet because I’m being super particular. I’ve even gone through phases where I think that I might never share it, but then the little voice chimes in saying: “What’s the point of writing if you don’t share it?!” lol! Internal conflicts… =p I’m quite sure I will post it someday, it’s just, as I get new ideas sometimes I go back an amend things. At some point I have to draw the line and say, “Chapter 1 is done… no more changes – moving on!” I’m sure you are hoping that day is sooner than later. (me too) =p I also really wish that I could drawing my characters, but with my mediocre skill and lack of time, I don’t see that happening unless some amazing unquenchable inspiration hits.

*stares back* “What? I’d be happy to share some of my schoolwork if you want me to write more.” =p :rofl:

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It’s cause I’m blonde isn’t it! :crazy:
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:jarksaber: I support °jark :salute:
:iconelementwing:
lol yes I did conider that hmmmmm idk I will think very carefuly before I post anything though =D
and ya I have noticed that th best thoughts comeat the randomist moments and sometimes its a bitch cus I don't have any paper or anythin to write it down on and by the time I get to it I forget alot of wat came to me *sigh*
Ahh though good luck with your wriing i sounds like yo r moving along fine *STARES* O_O i like to sare XD

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I'm a stinky old procrastinator -disgusted with self-
:iconn2hobbes:
*STARE* I have a 'super fun' cultural diversity paper you can write for me. =p lol!
*sigh* I can't wait until the end of this month... this class will be over.
Then I'll have like 2 months to work and also prepare for an Anime convention - yeah! :D

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It’s cause I’m blonde isn’t it! :crazy:
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:jarksaber: I support °jark :salute:

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